Well… it was better organized than the first one - no character mix-ups, no crazy punctuation. OTOH…
It reads like the most trainwrecky harlequin presents you've ever stumbled across - with vampires and other non-humans.
Many moons ago, our H met our h, they got together, they made mad whoopee for months, she got in the family way and then… dear old dad found her. Why is this a problem you ask? Daddy is a demon. Daddy wanted the unborn baby. Rather than confiding in the H and maybe making a joint decision on how to avoid daddy, she… quickly has a cesarian, hides the newborn in a chapel, and tells H that she aborted their baby - at 7 months. He lost his shit and strangled her - he thought. He refused a trial and accepted the death penalty. I'm not sure he ever told her this either…
L.O.S.T. organized his escape - that he didn't want.
8 years later, she runs across him after a mission goes to hell in a hand basket and he's dying on a hillside. She has an assortment of things on her person, including a concoction that saves dying vampires. She gives it to him, saving his life and making him a leedle special temporarily.
The stage is set.
The organization hunts her down and thereafter follows much chest beating (him) defiance (her), things like him stating clearly that he'll never trust her and she'll never be a part of his life (after he's whipped out the magic pen of course). Near the end he decides he can't live without her and suddenly everything is A-OK. Uhmmm… I don't think so. Sorry. Not happening. I'd never trust a guy who'd nearly killed me in a fit of rage any more than I'd ever have any use for a girlfriend who told me she killed my kid.